a stone is just a stone

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I really enjoyed reading this poem. It is very clearly yet beautifully executed. To me you seem to be talking about perspective; the unreliablility of human perception. To us, a rock is a dead, unanimated object, yet on an atomic level, there is just as much energy going on as there is on any object, no matter how inanimate it may seem in the larger view. To me, this poem seems to be advising us as humans to be aware of the obscure layering of the world around us, before making definate judgements about things. You've done a very good job.


a stone is just a stone
 
still
and dead
how close then
would I have to get -I don't know what the technique of adding 1 word each phrase is called, but I really like it.
 
to see
to feel
the atoms dance
and sparkle in the void -This is a beautiful closing line
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