05-14-2017, 12:05 AM
(05-04-2017, 05:27 AM)dukealien Wrote: Historiesdukealian,
Victors’ history, chock-full
of grand self-serving lies
is true as any die
compared to stories losers tell.
any die? or any dye?....I'm not sure how to take L3. Maybe omitting the conjunction at the beginning of L3 could enhance the read as well. anyway, I like it and hope my suggestions help.
Luna
In your own, each bone comes alive
the skeleton jangles in its perfunctory sleeve....
(Chris Martin)
the skeleton jangles in its perfunctory sleeve....
(Chris Martin)