05-12-2017, 10:23 AM
Cords
edit2;
Women spun their distaff tufts
to spindle-whorls cast down
whipped ‘round with song from tuft to thread
and thread to string to cord:
a woman’s life one skein
from when she learned to spin until
the shroud her daughters wove her.
Men spun plaited slings of cord
stones tucked in simple pockets
from which each whipping cast
released a singing bullet shot
for rabbit, wolf or foeman
dead or downed by stinging stone
each shot a lifeline severed.
On second (and third) thought, it wasn't that hard (and only a small bump) to address @nibbed's criticisms. The last line tries to retain the finality while adding a bit of drama, what? Thanks again!
edit2;
Women spun their distaff tufts
to spindle-whorls cast down
whipped ‘round with song from tuft to thread
and thread to string to cord:
a woman’s life one skein
from when she learned to spin until
the shroud her daughters wove her.
Men spun plaited slings of cord
stones tucked in simple pockets
from which each whipping cast
released a singing bullet shot
for rabbit, wolf or foeman
dead or downed by stinging stone
each shot a lifeline severed.
On second (and third) thought, it wasn't that hard (and only a small bump) to address @nibbed's criticisms. The last line tries to retain the finality while adding a bit of drama, what? Thanks again!
Non-practicing atheist