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a sound (revision 2)

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05-12-2017, 05:24 AM

(05-11-2017, 06:10 AM)burrealist Wrote:
(05-10-2017, 03:25 AM)LunaDeLore Wrote: I've read all three versions of the work and the second revision is my least favorite.

crumpled papers skip astray
and scatter across the boulevard....
I know what you mean. I'm trying to embody minimalism like everyone suggests. But the image needs to expand, as well.

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In your own, each bone comes alive
the skeleton jangles in its perfunctory sleeve....

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a sound (revision 2) - by burrealist - 05-04-2017, 05:18 AM

RE: a sound - by Keith - 05-04-2017, 05:25 AM

RE: a sound - by burrealist - 05-04-2017, 05:27 AM

RE: a sound - by nibbed - 05-04-2017, 06:07 AM

RE: a sound - by burrealist - 05-04-2017, 06:52 AM

RE: a sound - by just mercedes - 05-04-2017, 07:19 AM

RE: a sound - by nibbed - 05-04-2017, 08:23 AM

RE: a sound - by burrealist - 05-04-2017, 07:23 AM

RE: a sound - by RiverNotch - 05-05-2017, 12:16 AM

RE: a sound - by burrealist - 05-10-2017, 02:33 AM

RE: a sound (revision 2) - by LunaDeLore - 05-10-2017, 03:25 AM

RE: a sound (revision 2) - by burrealist - 05-11-2017, 06:10 AM

RE: a sound (revision 2) - by LunaDeLore - 05-12-2017, 05:24 AM

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