Second Edit: Kings Road

[Mark Cecil]

Hey Richard I really like your poem.  I love how you convey the deadness and lack of prospects of the location your talking about.

First Edit:

Kings Road

they repaved this road I like how this stanza opens with hope that things are looking up for the place  your talking about
since the last time
i visited
now the drive leaving home is smooth
as a promise in an election year  

but that fresh pavement The fact you use pavement here instead of just simply road creates a wonderful image in my head of the pavement as a gravestone almost watching the cars leave the place.  Although I know that might not have been your intention.
is like the face of a gravestone
the yellow line an epitaph  Excellent imagery in these two lines
reminding
future generations
where they'll go I love how you contrast both positive and negative emotions in the two stanzas.  Hope in the first and despair in the second.

Original:

Kings Road

they repaved this road
since the last time
i visited
now the drive leaving home is smooth
as a promise in an election year

but that fresh pavement
is like the face of a gravestone
the yellow line an epitaph
that will inspire
future generations