05-06-2017, 11:22 PM
Faceless doors and <<< it's amazing how the neighborhoods of NY can have such a sense of anonymity and community at the same time. If there’s any way you can weave in these 2 polar opposites, I think the overall feeling might improve.
grimy dry windows
hover above
cracked sidewalks <<< see comment below
The old corner store
longs for warm bodies <<< I got that business is going bad ....
The "L" roars past
like a jackhammer, <<< worked for me in tying the lines since it references back to the cracked sidewalks in sort of an subconscious way
Ah, the noise
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Tried to grow-up in Jersey and have spent lots of time in NYC and its boroughs. So, this one struck a chord.
grimy dry windows
hover above
cracked sidewalks <<< see comment below
The old corner store
longs for warm bodies <<< I got that business is going bad ....
The "L" roars past
like a jackhammer, <<< worked for me in tying the lines since it references back to the cracked sidewalks in sort of an subconscious way
Ah, the noise
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Tried to grow-up in Jersey and have spent lots of time in NYC and its boroughs. So, this one struck a chord.