Eyes
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(02-08-2017, 04:20 AM)JaredEggo Wrote:  Here's another one I'm working on.

I'm in my bed wide awake,
     fighting demons my body wants but my heart hates.

If I open my eyes 
     they're at my fingertips, ready to destroy me.

If I close my eyes
     they play a movie of all the things I've done.

I don't want to close my eyes
     because I'm afraid of what I'll see.

I don't want to open my eyes,
     but that pain is easier to bear.

So no matter what I do,
     I can't close my eyes.
From personal experience, it feels like it's about a couple of things:
1) Drugs
2) Bipolar disorder (maybe)/Mania
3) Paranoia

But again, as has been stated before in the thread, a description of the demons wouldn't hurt anyone. It is very open-ended as it is, and if that is what you wanted to go for, then good. I don't think that cliches hurt as much as others would, but yes, descriptions of pain do not have the same heat when you just say 'pain'.
The Chronicles of Lethargia
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Eyes - by JaredEggo - 02-08-2017, 04:20 AM
RE: Eyes - by canofworms - 02-09-2017, 12:43 PM
RE: Eyes - by Lizzie - 02-11-2017, 10:54 AM
RE: Eyes - by worros - 03-07-2017, 03:10 PM
RE: Eyes - by operadiva - 03-10-2017, 05:33 AM
RE: Eyes - by Powder - 03-12-2017, 03:07 AM
RE: Eyes - by Brownlie - 03-12-2017, 03:47 PM
RE: Eyes - by burrealist - 03-22-2017, 09:42 AM
RE: Eyes - by Graca - 03-26-2017, 12:24 AM
RE: Eyes - by nibbed - 03-26-2017, 01:01 AM
RE: Eyes - by Franklin'sMan - 03-27-2017, 05:56 AM
RE: Eyes - by Richard - 04-02-2017, 05:38 AM
RE: Eyes - by C.los - 04-24-2017, 09:23 AM
RE: Eyes - by wordgobbler - 04-26-2017, 12:55 PM
RE: Eyes - by AttnAttack - 04-29-2017, 03:09 AM
RE: Eyes - by Radetof.Yahska - 04-30-2017, 06:18 AM
RE: Eyes - by QueenFaye - 04-30-2017, 05:21 PM
RE: Eyes - by inmostcave - 05-01-2017, 09:43 AM
RE: Eyes - by Josiah - 05-05-2017, 06:40 AM
RE: Eyes - by spiritthebrave - 05-29-2017, 04:07 AM



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