04-30-2017, 06:18 AM
(02-08-2017, 04:20 AM)JaredEggo Wrote: Here's another one I'm working on.From personal experience, it feels like it's about a couple of things:
I'm in my bed wide awake,
fighting demons my body wants but my heart hates.
If I open my eyes
they're at my fingertips, ready to destroy me.
If I close my eyes
they play a movie of all the things I've done.
I don't want to close my eyes
because I'm afraid of what I'll see.
I don't want to open my eyes,
but that pain is easier to bear.
So no matter what I do,
I can't close my eyes.
1) Drugs
2) Bipolar disorder (maybe)/Mania
3) Paranoia
But again, as has been stated before in the thread, a description of the demons wouldn't hurt anyone. It is very open-ended as it is, and if that is what you wanted to go for, then good. I don't think that cliches hurt as much as others would, but yes, descriptions of pain do not have the same heat when you just say 'pain'.
The Chronicles of Lethargia