Higher Still

[headybeach]

I have to go agree with ellajam, I love the flow and rhyme of this poem, but I think that you've limited yourself too much by it and your poem has become kind of swallowed by it. When reading it, my mind is focusing more on the rhythm and rhyme rather than on the meaning of the words because the words feel like they were placed *for* the rhyme rather than *with* the rhyme sometimes. I do really like the message that's behind this poem and I think that it does a nice job, at some parts, of giving off that feeling of childhood wonder. I think this poem is definitely worth your effort to play around with a little bit more and I'd love to see a future version, if you decide to edit it! Thank you for sharing!