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How long is the video?

~ 5 - 7 min

Do you speak throughout or give breaks?

I give varied breaks where I feel a pause after a stanza or a line would seal an impact and give time for reflection. 

Do the breaks match up with breaks in your poem?

Yes; I've placed the breaks according to where and how big the pauses are, whilst speaking.

Speak slow or fast?

Medium tempo, with possible light switches.  

I tried to write as clearly as I could, and give punctuation that I considered appropriate, to my level of understanding. Some of the longer sentences I have split into two or more lines, but I have indicated where a sentence is being continued and where a new one starts, by the use of lower and upper case letters. I don't use much of end punctuation, because I don't feel it's needed. Most poetry lines to me end 'floating in the air', as if they are let go in the ether, and nothing asks to be there to obstruct their natural flow / way out. You just wait for another one to follow... Some of the lines indeed drop to the floor with a distinguishable bounce. 
I felt the line breaks are needed because that's where I usually would pause, and did not want you to read the piece as a bulky whole of text.

 Also, with poetry, often less is more, some phrases in here seem only for length,

Could you please indicate for me, which lines in particular seem only for length?

and some of your points or views could be stronger.

Could you please point which ones could those be?

What inclines good question, maybe a dash for a second thought
What makes the brimming Spring
brace the exposed
So immaculate, so chaste is spring immaculate or the exposed? 
as though as virginal

Actually, the first two lines are like dreamy metaphors introducing the curiosity that drives the piece. A way of questioning Why one adorns them self.
During this introductory voice over the video is supposed to show me getting up in my bed, about to get ready...
I head to the mirror to have a first look at my bare image.
I look at my face and see it as an artist sees a blank canvas; immaculate, untouched, and hence there's the need to apply some creativity, as the Spring would, to bare, exposed land...
  

But if a gaze is that of a masculine power
Would you rather I came bare or covered? Because your addressing femininity I assume it's natural to consider what a masculine power Would think? Or would you rather talk about how a woman might consider how a feminine peer might view her?  Speaking of make-up, and from my own perspective, it seems women care more about it than men as a whole overall.  I personally find make up gross and don't want to look at it. Not saying a face can't be beautiful with make-up, I think make up is just distracting more than anything... war paint

Do you feel I should entertain a woman's perspective of the question?
Perhaps; though, I figured, the piece is also addressing some romantic insecurities; because of this and my current orientation, I am more drawn toward a masculine spectator. 
Your point of view on make up is quite intriguing, and could as well contribute to the cause of this piece;
First time hearing the label 'war paint' in reference to make-up. 

The aim is what you’re always bothered with your aim in dressing is what would a masculine power be bothered by? Or you are always bothered by the aims of your dressing?

How come I've made it so complicated 
It's basically saying, The aim (of what I'm doing to my image) is what you (the male spectator) are always bothered with. 'Why do you do this' etc 
For example, if I made an appearance or 'came' to visit someone, they would wonder 'Why is she dressed like this / wearing this make-up'...

That what is watching
is always wondering what lies under it all all - not just clothes, measuring a person
To unruin the already ruined, too broken here for sentence structure.  Who's judging now what is ruined or who will fix what
or stretch out my frame
To rehabilitate, renovate, or extend other examples of unruining

Ahem, Should all lines in a poem follow rules of sentence structure? 
The latter is an extension of the first line; these are some clues that could be going through one's mind as to Why I am doing this.

If you weigh what’s mine and what it counters I cannot grasp what counters what's yours since I'm not sure the yours of which you speak, the 'all' from before?

The 'what is (and is not) mine' are the elements of my image, which could potentially be there to counter something... 

How can I please feel bothered

This I would like to keep fairly ambiguous, but it's basically my response to your speculations. 
Might remove the 'please'; thank you.
However I added it there to make the conclusion sound gentler, because my first go was 'How can I ever bother with you', but figured it would be a bit too tense.

Sat inside the shared-house shared-house to me is your mind

Great interpretation!

Roaring walls of desire cry out
for more time, rewiring,
and something to buy her introducing a new character or buy for herself, buy her more time.

Speaking of myself in third person.

Sat inside the shared-house
Roaring walls of desire cry out
for more time, rewiring,
and something to buy her
Like a capricious child
acute in acquiring
the preciousness of cute cuteness is precious yes? I first read precious as precocious which I learned from Mary Poppins in regards to children but capricious is a better word. How about, 'acute in acquiring cuteness'

I'm not sure if 'cuteness' would sound fit as an ending.
  

The quiet space seemed inviting
The space between the pilot of the vessel good rhyme wrestle vessel, 
and the smileless wrestle
of fear and courage racing each other
till the winner meets the sighting of the reflection meet the sight or meet the reflection?

Could be that I'm misusing English somehow, but to me 'sighting of the reflection' is fairly understandable; I guess I was going for something ending with 'ing' before the word 'reflection' .. as the words 'sight' and 'reflection' came up in my mind, and they are relatable, but wouldn't seem to fit the way they are, so I was thinking, 'sight of the reflection'; 'sighting of the reflection'

So I bite on some dried fruit
Soya milk
And guess I’m about to go with it food because you mentioned earlier -stretch out my frame-

Can I ask what makes you come up with such association?
- Food and Stretching out my frame
Interesting.
These are actually some random vegan snacks to promote my awesome diet (yay), and make the reflective story telling more casual..

The whole of my ensemble
could do with another note in it
A little change of rote
Not estranged –
still resembling the strength that I came here with came to this dress ensemble decision? Came to this shared-house?

No; the shared house is the place I am currently living in as a student, for the sake of some bare authenticity  
'Came here' as in, came into this word. It is a reference to the idiom, being a perfect God's creation, and an embodiment of beauty, strength and creativity.
So even if I alter my image, the embodiment is still there. And should be there in the first place.

The lines that I draw
are not there to shame the lands that they claim intent on clowning? My wife has mastered her eyebrow lines

Why intent on clowning? 
This was derived from the thinking that whatever you use to overlay / mask, is in some way a dismissal to what it covers, in terms of applying make-up.
So this wouldn't be the case.

Rather rhyme with them,
with the aim of acclaiming the finery
of the apricots and pines evergreen and fruit? The pines on your face take away the finery in this image
aligned so divinely
within the arches of my eyebrows

That's a fair opinion, makes me think...
Though I wanted to create a little contrast, because to me not every single element in my portrait is considered fine, however as a whole, the image is.

The lines that I draw
Rhyme with them with so little rhyme throughout here I don't think you should repeat this here. Doesn't help

What do you mean, so little rhyme throughout here? Through out the poem so far, or the last stanza, or?

This sand is the sand the dry self-view

Another interesting interpretation. 
How does a dry self view come across here?

the land, and the nation, is mine just go with the world, nation makes this political when it doesn't need to be
And it’s fine to do whatever I favour

Interesting point. I incorporated 'nation', because I wanted to draw attention also to my ethnic traits, as another component of my image.

For the hand brings bliss bliss from courage winning the race to the reflection?

Nope; bliss from allowing my creativity, and adorning myself. 

Merging in awe
Married I would drop married, opens up too many interpretations to be left at the end here, brings me a little doubt to all I read before.

I just thought it would sound nice there... And signifies unity and engagement with your whole creation.
How does it bring you doubt to what you've read?
However, what about:

Being more.

Hope this helps, good luck on your project

Thank you, Thank you, Thank you, Sir
for your insightful feedback and engaging thoughts. 
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Learning quite a lot from this.