04-12-2017, 09:31 PM
Hi Elizazile, I hope my feedback will be helpfull you since it is the first one I write 
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I really like the absence of a structure because in your poem you talk about the uncertainty of what to do (in line 7 "I am told I must make... Whatever that may mean"). In my opinion this shows that the person in the poem is not sure how to get hold of the situation and a poem with no structure is exactly that, if there is no structure you can't just grab it you first have to understand it to get hold of it.
I could not figure out an interpretations all on my own though, this may be because my mother tongue is german but I would maybe divide the poem in two parts (from beginning to line 10 " and for brighter somedays." and from there on the the end) to underline the turning point and to make it easier to understand.
I hope this helps you. Best wishes!
.I really like the absence of a structure because in your poem you talk about the uncertainty of what to do (in line 7 "I am told I must make... Whatever that may mean"). In my opinion this shows that the person in the poem is not sure how to get hold of the situation and a poem with no structure is exactly that, if there is no structure you can't just grab it you first have to understand it to get hold of it.
I could not figure out an interpretations all on my own though, this may be because my mother tongue is german but I would maybe divide the poem in two parts (from beginning to line 10 " and for brighter somedays." and from there on the the end) to underline the turning point and to make it easier to understand.
I hope this helps you. Best wishes!