Loser

[nibbed]

Hi Paul Welsh

Sorry I didn't see this right away. Strange how this poem was staring me in the face when I came back to this site from another window, so I will have to comment. Your fonts seem to indicate you want the words to be louder? I will copy in smaller print to fit my comments.




Coffin carriers high                                               Suggests someone was favored or well loved. A great loss.
straight gaits pitch make cuff shoots                    folks were under conviction? straightening up? at a funeral? from a sermon, maybe?
cement step over denomination trade                  a hardened or stubborn relative, maybe accepting a change in faith of someone else?
holy water coolant drops                                      someone's warming up or...feel safer being Catholic?
got ceiling fresco eyes                                           stiff necked or has soft eyes...?
Altar ego trip                                                         interesting, could mean two things maybe?



seems more a puzzle or a paragraph of clues.
mysterious with almost a "spy-like" quality
as though a spy is reporting back through code.
Not sure why it is titled "loser", though,
but perhaps you could get into more detail?

Hopefully you didn't have a rough day
or suffered a loss...and hope you are well.
Have a great evening. Best Wishes!




Coffin carriers high                                
straight gaits pitch make cuff shoots
cement steps over denomination trade
holy water coolant drops
got ceiling fresco eyes
Altar ego trip