Song (3rd revision)

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This reminds me of through the ages people writing hymns or psalms and just calling them that, psalm 42, hymn 107, this is like your song 1.  The problem is, is this a song, or a poem about a song, I'll tell you it's a hobby of mine to make poems into songs regardless of the why's and whatfors 

Song

if time dies
or skies fall I like your set up here cause the sky falling is not necessarily the end of time thanks chicken little


or waves stand idle I love this image

sonic without sound, but I don't get this one

its empty song will say goodbye for you,
Why's it empty? Full of potential energy, is this times song? 'Its' , also, 'you' Must have left without saying goodbye?

lie down
encased in sound without sonics?
euphony of you


when we sleep
we rise and fall I can only picture breathing here, sleeping makes me think static, no rising or falling


echoes through an empty hall nice, is this hall the song because they're both empty? And the echoing must be the silence?


we hold time still
in our arms like a baby, why arms?


waves continue, we move while holding time still? You say a lot of good things but connectivity doesn't hit me


I'll savor memory,
its fadeless shine in blue


spare its harmony I'll spare its harmony? Or 'you! Spare its harmony' or 'sparing harmony'


I've felt what song can do writing about music is like dancing about architecture, not a problem per se, but the music made you feel, and you want to share that feeling, so this last line I think you should change to wrap up all the previous metaphors without saying song or felt, if possible

Hope this helps