04-06-2017, 01:04 AM
I'm not looking for extensive critiques, but I think I missed a point to haiku. With these few, I'm focused on a linear time frame. Starting from one place and moving through the images to a grander scheme... Have I gotten that right?
Stupid wind
Slicing my face with snow flakes--
Go away
Mountainsides
Sweep crackled branches throughout
The city
Raindrops
Paint my feet with mud--
Little buds
The sun
Unforgiving and restless--
Apocalypse
Am I getting the general point?
Stupid wind
Slicing my face with snow flakes--
Go away
Mountainsides
Sweep crackled branches throughout
The city
Raindrops
Paint my feet with mud--
Little buds
The sun
Unforgiving and restless--
Apocalypse
Am I getting the general point?
