Loads that Bear Measure

[Lizzie]

It's not very common anymore to capitalize the first letter of each line. It's confusing. Originally, it had to do with how things needed to be typeset, but that's irrelevant now.

I don't like the title, but I can't put my finger on why at the moment, so I'll get back to you.

I was born into this bowl of crap. -- maybe "a bowl of crap" -- being verbs like "was" are also weak.
Dropped on heavy burden. -- this isn't a complete sentence.
In the heap of it all, I managed my weight. -- "of it all" isn't needed, and doesn't refer back to anything or give us any detail. Put in something concrete, I think. "Managed my weight" can also refer to dieting and staying on an exercise/eating plan which seems to take the poem off in a different direction, unless the poem is actually about physical weight, which is also possible.
But -- don't need this, just go straight to the next line
Thptpthptpth!
First thing in the morning. -- not a complete sentence, also a common expression boarding on cliche
Is this fat guy one stall over -- like the ending a lot. One stall over makes me think bathroom, which ties in with the crap of the first line
My future?



Thoughts/opinions/attacks/ or general critiques welcome!