Moving (Edit #1)

[aschueler]

How long, how much water until
    you can float?
I usually don't like blatant questions in poetry but I love this.  It is simple and stark. I feel the sense that someone is patient and deserving for their time to let go.
I also love the threat of the bird at the end.  He makes me unsettled in the best of ways.

Thanks, Carrie.  Anything that doesn't work as well for you?  

Will will put a revision up likely sometime this weekend.