03-24-2017, 06:44 AM
This is a preference only but I prefer ending on picture.
Another option might be to adjust the title to something that incorporates the new ending. Let the title do that work.
Just a thought.
It isn't ruined in the new edit. This is just my personal preference. I like the snapshot being the defining opening and close. What happens after doesn't seem to be the poem to me, though it could be alluded to outside the poem (title).
Best,
Todd
Another option might be to adjust the title to something that incorporates the new ending. Let the title do that work.
Just a thought.
It isn't ruined in the new edit. This is just my personal preference. I like the snapshot being the defining opening and close. What happens after doesn't seem to be the poem to me, though it could be alluded to outside the poem (title).
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson