03-21-2017, 06:17 AM
(03-21-2017, 03:47 AM)Erthona Wrote: Opium is the religion of the masses
The rich throw us under their mill,
indiscriminately grind our flesh & bones,
yet forbid us poppies to succor
our mental anguish or quite our pitiful moans.
erthona©2017
Not that I think mixed metaphors aren't a useful construct, especially in poetry;
but I'm wondering if "throw us under their mill" was intentional. (I was thinking of the mix of
"throw us under the bus"... combined with one of the many "mill" metaphors. Since you use
"grind our flesh & bones" in the second line, I think the first line might be "throw us in their mill".
Hmm, maybe something different; but you get the idea.
As for as "the rich" goes, that never gets old.
("Bourgeoisie" being a bit too cute?)Ray
P.S. Poppies forbidden, yes; but what about video games, YouTube, or free poetry sites where
we can rebel in obscurity?
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions

