03-21-2017, 02:41 AM
Thanks nibbed,
Good catch, you're right it should be shoulder (singular), will change. Yeah I struggled with the title, or rather the title is correct, but the poem turned into something different than what it was suppose to be.
Stroking the vein causes it to rise to the top.
"Feel" here is not a sensory feel, but a knowing "feel". As "I feel the devil is out to get me."
Thanks for the thoughtful critique,
dale
Good catch, you're right it should be shoulder (singular), will change. Yeah I struggled with the title, or rather the title is correct, but the poem turned into something different than what it was suppose to be.
Stroking the vein causes it to rise to the top.
"Feel" here is not a sensory feel, but a knowing "feel". As "I feel the devil is out to get me."
Thanks for the thoughtful critique,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.