03-20-2017, 03:14 AM
I really like "Maintaining" as the title of this piece. I like that it suggests proactivity and ongoing effort, but then exposes via the poem that following 'best practices' prescriptions for showing care isn't enough. I feel like it sets up well the poem's focus on the importance of intangible/more intuitive elements of caring for something (a car or a relationship) in truly maintaining it.
I also like the lack of punctuation and capitalization. I feel like it conveys the narrator's state of being untethered, wanting to be grounded by a connection between their intuition and the *official instructions* but remaining somewhat unbounded and all over the place, searching
I agree with a previous post that "tire reads thirty two pounds of pressure" could be re-worded to specify if this is an instruction rather than the current state of the car.
I also like the lack of punctuation and capitalization. I feel like it conveys the narrator's state of being untethered, wanting to be grounded by a connection between their intuition and the *official instructions* but remaining somewhat unbounded and all over the place, searching
I agree with a previous post that "tire reads thirty two pounds of pressure" could be re-worded to specify if this is an instruction rather than the current state of the car.