03-17-2017, 10:31 AM
Thanks for the read, achebe, interesting. That's a pretty big failing, the meter should carry the poem, not kill it. 
I like how you made a better poem of it, I'll see if that's a direction I could go with this. I'll also see what I can do to replace cherish, you're always good at picking out the clinkers. Thanks for taking your time with this.
I like how you made a better poem of it, I'll see if that's a direction I could go with this. I'll also see what I can do to replace cherish, you're always good at picking out the clinkers. Thanks for taking your time with this.
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