Greatly appreciate it Todd, not nearly as savage as my own, i think i meed a major overhaul, for s2 I considered a felt smelt take to change up the senses more but I still may be able to in changing that line. Will take your suggestion for s3 and as far as the Savage cut I need to just rework it for length, I thought the offbeat pattern made the first half more interesting
(03-17-2017, 03:08 AM)nibbed Wrote: Hi, CRNDLSM
Thanks for the read nibbed
I really liked the first three stanzas and I get
where you were going with them wanting
to meet up with the maybes (the title seems
to reflect). I would rework and simplify it a bit.
I definitely can see this worked clearer. What worked clearer?
I somehow saw a taste of beauty and then a spilling
of hope and help? Have a blessed day!
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