03-15-2017, 04:54 AM
Thanks for the read and the suggestions, Todd. Helpful as always. 
I made a couple of slight revisions from your critique, including switching those two stanzas. Good call out.
It's funny that you mention "Little Boxes" because I wanted to reference that song explicitly, but I figured I probably was implicitly, so decided to leave it at that. Gratified to hear that it's coming to mind as you read.
Yes to the borg culture.
Glad to hear that the title is working -- titles are my nemesis.
Thanks again for the feedback!
I made a couple of slight revisions from your critique, including switching those two stanzas. Good call out.
It's funny that you mention "Little Boxes" because I wanted to reference that song explicitly, but I figured I probably was implicitly, so decided to leave it at that. Gratified to hear that it's coming to mind as you read.
Yes to the borg culture.
Glad to hear that the title is working -- titles are my nemesis.
Thanks again for the feedback!