03-14-2017, 05:37 AM
I think in your current arrangement the choice is either cut the pipes or leave them exactly where they are. I'm not sure there's a better placement for them in the poem.
I was 50/50 on suggesting cutting when I was reading but came to a place of acceptance with the section.
I was 50/50 on suggesting cutting when I was reading but came to a place of acceptance with the section.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
