Aubade for the Bipolar

[Todd]

The morning is for Rachmaninoff and bees,
and the soft steps of pollened feet,

as black separates from white. This is the only line I think should change. The rest of the poem sounds well thought-out, but here you use basic ideas, such as black/white contrast, and the word "separate". Maybe you could replace this with something completely different, but still keep the same meaning. For example, you could say something about how oil and water separate rather than mix (or milk and vinegar, as that'd keep the idea of the b/w contrast).

The sun is a bronze chime
and half the bed shivers.

In the copper glow,
the dew on the leaf 

is a dappled darkness.

Overall, I think this is a good poem. I especially like the fifth line. "The bed shivers" makes me think of flowers in a flowerbed being blown by the wind, and then in the next line you mention a "copper glow", which makes me think of Autumn.

Hi Fox Womb, I appreciate the critique. I'll give some thought to the point you raise on the third line when I start the next revision. 

Best,

Todd