Fake News - Edit 1

[baifan]

Structurally, I like this very much. There is a straightforward and simple premise, which I feel allows the reader to get on board with the themes right away. Here are some personal thoughts:

The pictures showed us laughing on the beach,
olive tanned with martini eyes fixed on each other. -to be honest, I'm not sure if "martini eyes" resonates with me. I get the associated imagery of the olive and the martini drink, but no particular image pops into my head when I read "martini eyes." What effect is this metaphor supposed to have on me my and understanding of the eyes in this poem?

I remember the sand
in my shoes, and the sun in my eyes -interesting opportunity here to match syntactic repetition with structural repetition (i.e. line break after "sun" to match the placement of the "in my eyes" with the "in my shoes")
as we walked to the bar
and fought for an hour
over where to eat. -personally, I like the simple language here. Walked is clear and consistent; anything fancier and it might feel strained

She told me to smile
when the waiter took our picture.

I feel that there's almost a missed opportunity for some great narrative closure here. In the beginning, you say that you are laughing in the pictures. At the end, you say that she tells you to smile in the picture. That is to say, the pictures at the beginning and end are suggested to be different. I feel (and this is a personal opinion) that you could really tighten up the story and the images here if you somehow made them refer to the same picture. This could be as simple as changing "laughing" to "smiling."

Lastly, I agree with what's been said before about the title. "Fake News" obviously carries heavy political and satirical connotations in these post-election days. Your poem seems to fit more as a self-reflective narrative, a kind of "life" poem if I may. I think it would be unfair to mislead a socially-conscious reader into thinking that your poem will offer some kind of direct political/social-commentary.

Overall, nice poem though. It's simple without being dry, and you pack three clearly felt and well-paced thematic punches in relatively few words.