soda springs

[mikebauer]

ok... but, notice that i'm using the landscape as a body and walking my brain over the body, and when it gets to the point where i can't play metaphor anymore, i bring in 'dik'. it's an expressionist poem, not a naturalistic write, and i'm trying to provoke the reader's imagination into following the poem, just as the narrator is following between boulders -- big round things -- happy to obey the leader. it's a totally homo poem, woven inside a sensibility. but, i'd expect any poet who's a poet to want to re-write something which seemed even semi-poetry into a real poem. so, i'm easy with your re-write, if you want to do it.

yeah but will you do any edits on it?

it's as good as most poems i've read but i think it could improve a little.