03-10-2017, 10:24 AM
Among the Ladies remove "senryu" here, since it's kinda distracting, and it is what it is.
A moral man must
have been widowered to make
that comparison.
aww, i read the comment that this was about abstinence first, so my read is kinda biased. i find it funny, though -- alliteration in the first line make for a kinda mumbly sound, widowered seems an inherently bouncy word (and i think since the usual term is "widowed", with the last line "comparison" and the title, "among the ladies", i think there's an emphasis on the difference between woman's and man's morality), and the last line was a curve ball for me at first that in its strangeness engaged me enough to read it twice more and bat it before the inning (me use metaphor right?)---me like.
A moral man must
have been widowered to make
that comparison.
aww, i read the comment that this was about abstinence first, so my read is kinda biased. i find it funny, though -- alliteration in the first line make for a kinda mumbly sound, widowered seems an inherently bouncy word (and i think since the usual term is "widowed", with the last line "comparison" and the title, "among the ladies", i think there's an emphasis on the difference between woman's and man's morality), and the last line was a curve ball for me at first that in its strangeness engaged me enough to read it twice more and bat it before the inning (me use metaphor right?)---me like.