03-06-2017, 09:39 AM
El,
A smoothly written surrealistic poem. Can't say I am fond of the flipped cliche "turn a frown upside down" to "smile when turned becomes a frown", nor the somewhat ad hoc french phrases.
"maintain her joie de vivre, a bit risqué" (even though it is a French form, there is nothing within the poem that sets that up.
both of which are near cliche in themselves.
A bit of a lunacy romp than a nonsense poem. Trees the charm.
Whenever does a husband see his wife?
It's sad but true:
still, it goes the other way too!
dale
A smoothly written surrealistic poem. Can't say I am fond of the flipped cliche "turn a frown upside down" to "smile when turned becomes a frown", nor the somewhat ad hoc french phrases.
"maintain her joie de vivre, a bit risqué" (even though it is a French form, there is nothing within the poem that sets that up.
both of which are near cliche in themselves.
A bit of a lunacy romp than a nonsense poem. Trees the charm.
Whenever does a husband see his wife?
It's sad but true:
still, it goes the other way too!
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.