03-02-2017, 04:35 AM
I'd missed this the first time around, Lizzie.
You pull off the conceit well.
The wiring in the screen door was an inspired change. It solved the problems in the previous version, worked well in the metaphor, and gave the image a cheap, flimsy nature.
Very well done!
You pull off the conceit well.
The wiring in the screen door was an inspired change. It solved the problems in the previous version, worked well in the metaphor, and gave the image a cheap, flimsy nature.
Very well done!
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson