03-01-2017, 11:23 AM
actually, it would be hilarious if the last line wasn't a line, just a word -- nay, a symbol. the ! is unusual, perhaps even the point, and leaving it alone while reading it as a word still reads the (in English, unnecessary) 5-7-5:
rain pellets fury,
wind shouts a rattling blast: though not seven -- if you were really a stickler, you would edit, perhaps change blast, otherwise the current construction suffices.*
!
* -- or perhaps, to enhance that "rattling", "wind shouting a rattling blast", though that breaks the tense a bit
rain pellets fury,
wind shouts a rattling blast: though not seven -- if you were really a stickler, you would edit, perhaps change blast, otherwise the current construction suffices.*
!
* -- or perhaps, to enhance that "rattling", "wind shouting a rattling blast", though that breaks the tense a bit