Aubade for the Bipolar

[Donald Q.]

Donald: You seem to be seeing an unevenness in the power of the lines. Which goes back to my view that every line should be your best line--and while that isn't practical because they're holistically connected I can see your point.

It's probably just the online format which makes me focus on line-by-line judgement, possibly too much at times... It's important to remember the holistic aspect of the whole poem as you rightly point out. Thanks for keeping me on my toes with my feedback. I miss doing it with pen and paper now!