Aubade for the Bipolar

[Donald Q.]

The morning is for Rachmaninoff and bees,
and the soft steps of pollened feet, these two lines are really great

as black separates from white. Not sure about this, perhaps it's because I have the black and yellow in mind instead from bees... but this line gives me less than those preceeding it.

The sun is a bronze chime simple and very effective
and half the bed shivers. This is intriguing and nice, not sure about 'and' though, minor reservations about it.

In the copper glow,
the dew on the leaf these two lines are decent but not quite as powerful as the rest.

is a dappled darkness. Like it but don't think it's set up quite right from previous two lines

Really nice Todd, those first two lines are so great and it feels like the rest is close to being sorted. Strong work, keen to see the edit.