02-24-2017, 05:42 AM
The dashes and exclamation marks made me think for a moment that Emily D had strayed into the Pen.
There's not much here to link me to a concrete world - though 'seed-stained' is good imagery. The distancing of the narrator, from 'we' to 'you', gave an even more fragmentary feeling.
There's not much here to link me to a concrete world - though 'seed-stained' is good imagery. The distancing of the narrator, from 'we' to 'you', gave an even more fragmentary feeling.