Theosis
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(03-15-2016, 08:30 PM)RiverNotch Wrote:  THEOSIS

We are not devils -- we are gods,
once bathed -- washed of the clods
seed-stained -- taste of the love! I would choose one of the loves, having two back to back is not working for me.
Love your Holy Flesh -- from above! Phrasing is ambiguous. Is the loving accomplished from above or is the flesh coming down from above to be loved down here? Is it a command to love one's flesh that came from above? And who does 'your' refer to? 
Hello River. I dislike the double dashes in the middle more than anything else. So, picky, I know.

"the love" is vague, and "above" is too, but I can more easily divine the meaning of the second.  Wink
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Theosis - by RiverNotch - 03-15-2016, 08:30 PM
RE: Theosis - by Achebe - 03-15-2016, 11:02 PM
RE: Theosis - by RiverNotch - 03-22-2016, 03:51 PM
RE: Theosis - by Lizzie - 02-24-2017, 04:58 AM
RE: Theosis - by just mercedes - 02-24-2017, 05:42 AM
RE: Theosis - by RiverNotch - 02-27-2017, 12:27 AM
RE: Theosis - by Lizzie - 02-27-2017, 05:29 PM
RE: Theosis - by RiverNotch - 02-27-2017, 11:50 PM



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