02-23-2017, 10:16 PM
I think the structure 'but not' repeats too much, I would use other words. I read the 'but never'... and that helps soften the repetition. Although if the purpose is to highlight the long list of that woman and her character, it's fine. I like the contrast and the variety of adjectives.
(02-13-2017, 07:39 AM)Mark Cecil Wrote:Handsome but not vainAthletic but not JockeyTall but not ginormousIntelligent but not nerdyWell read but not bookishSensitive but not effeminateStrong but not steroidalLeading but not tyrannicalArticulate but not wordyThoughtful but never aloofÂWise but not a wise guySupportive but not clingy(...)