02-21-2017, 08:49 AM
Lizzie
The difference between when a trope works and doesn't is whether it impacts the conscious or unconscious mind. For a trope to work (and we will include the above in that category) it has to be as if it were thrown off, otherwise the reader (in this case myself) feels as if I am being manipulated by the writer. Another aspect of this is it becomes a distraction to the poem. To go a little further, what was the rationale in writing
"we awaken to the sounds
of dump trucks cement mixers
hydraulics hissing"
instead of:
"We awaken to the hydraulic hissing sound
of dump trucks and cement mixers?"
Does one do something over the other? If so I do not see it, and for me it is only a distraction.
dale
The difference between when a trope works and doesn't is whether it impacts the conscious or unconscious mind. For a trope to work (and we will include the above in that category) it has to be as if it were thrown off, otherwise the reader (in this case myself) feels as if I am being manipulated by the writer. Another aspect of this is it becomes a distraction to the poem. To go a little further, what was the rationale in writing
"we awaken to the sounds
of dump trucks cement mixers
hydraulics hissing"
instead of:
"We awaken to the hydraulic hissing sound
of dump trucks and cement mixers?"
Does one do something over the other? If so I do not see it, and for me it is only a distraction.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.