02-21-2017, 05:43 AM
Thank you, Donald. The poem is meant to be a man begging forgiveness for being unfaithful. Based on what you said, I've already restored the original first stanza which has an off-rhyme between lines 1 and 4 (the other stanzas rhyme 2 and 4):
Dear, save your words until the morn.
Now, let only the walls
speak their uneven memories;
just hold me, as before.
It's better, I think, to lose the pattern in one stanza than to use words that don't make sense.
I'll think about the other things you said.
Dear, save your words until the morn.
Now, let only the walls
speak their uneven memories;
just hold me, as before.
It's better, I think, to lose the pattern in one stanza than to use words that don't make sense.
I'll think about the other things you said.