02-18-2017, 01:11 PM
We all use the word "troll" to mean a person who is trying to stir up trouble on the internet, but actual trolls are Skandinavian mythical figures -- either giants or dwarfs. How does a giant or dwarf relate to the theme of this poem? If the troll is representing the infirmaties of old age, I think you should consider another symbol.
Actually, I see that the dictionary says that a troll can be a derelict, but I have the same problem with a derelict as a symbol for old age infirmaties -- although a derelict makes more sense to me. Perhaps you should just use the word "derelict". If you use the word "vagabond", that would make more sense. The infirmaties of old age (of which I have about 13 myself) can be seen as illegitimate, just as vagabonds are.
Once you fix that (if you choose to), I think you'll have a good poem.
I hope I'm interpreting your symbolism correctly. He/she swung on the rope in play in childhood, and now he uses it to hang on. I wonder -- might you also be suggesting at the end that the man hang himself?
Wow, I didn't realize ropes can represent so many things: play, hanging on to life, death -- there must be many more.
Actually, I see that the dictionary says that a troll can be a derelict, but I have the same problem with a derelict as a symbol for old age infirmaties -- although a derelict makes more sense to me. Perhaps you should just use the word "derelict". If you use the word "vagabond", that would make more sense. The infirmaties of old age (of which I have about 13 myself) can be seen as illegitimate, just as vagabonds are.
Once you fix that (if you choose to), I think you'll have a good poem.
I hope I'm interpreting your symbolism correctly. He/she swung on the rope in play in childhood, and now he uses it to hang on. I wonder -- might you also be suggesting at the end that the man hang himself?
Wow, I didn't realize ropes can represent so many things: play, hanging on to life, death -- there must be many more.