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Good kigo, though the adjectives aren't traditional. (I guess you're going for traditional, with the syllable count and lack of a title.) Good shift of focus from close-up blossoms to hat blowing away; lovely final line leaves me to picture the untethered goat finding the hat and chewing it. Very nice, Billy.
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haiku: - by billy - 12-15-2011, 03:52 AM
RE: haiku: - by Lizzie - 02-17-2017, 02:50 PM
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