caroline

[Lizzie]

Silk screen of sweat on your shoulder -- lovely
paralyzes me from across the room. -- maybe "nets" instead of "paralyzes" to go with the fabric theme?
How I long to press my cheek there.
How I long to lay my head next to you. -- I'd omit this line. The previous is a stronger ending because it keeps the focus on that bit of shoulder we've imagined.

Unlike so many love poems, this one doesn't run on and on.