Cannabis

[ponykeeper]

Hi Myotis

I think this has potential, but I think the fact that you are trying to rhyme without a discernibly consistent rhythm is hurting the outcome. I actually like the last line, but think you need to boil the contents down a bit to get to the real essence here.

If in nature we were to find
A tree such as thee
The most precious thing to the human mind

We would consume this sticky tree
To smoke or eat a tasty treat
Unlocking our minds to be free

Although not a tree, cannabis grows wild in many areas of the world so the above lines seem somewhat superfluous.

Good luck with this, thanks for the opportunity to read and comment.