The Bird Sat On a Branch
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I really appreciate the feedback, Donald. You are right about me trying to fit the meter, and that line is a bit awkward. It was originally titled "The Puppet Show", but I decided to go with the current one because I kind of saw it as a photograph or a painting of sorts, with the title conveying what it was, but also having some layers underneath (if that makes sense). I can definitely see how I just shuttle out the cosmic issues so quickly, so I'll go back and see what I can do. Thanks so much! you were a huge help.
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The Bird Sat On a Branch - by kylede87 - 02-10-2017, 08:41 AM
RE: The Bird Sat On a Branch - by Donald Q. - 02-10-2017, 09:04 AM
RE: The Bird Sat On a Branch - by kylede87 - 02-10-2017, 09:58 PM
RE: The Bird Sat On a Branch - by Lizzie - 02-11-2017, 03:04 PM
RE: The Bird Sat On a Branch - by Achebe - 02-11-2017, 07:20 PM
RE: The Bird Sat On a Branch - by kylede87 - 02-13-2017, 03:47 AM



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