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Guilty gifts
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This is a really great one, my only comment is the switch of s3 to the beginning makes the she pronoun a little more confusing, is she the ocean, the mocha stand, or the girl were about to meet. Nothing like a tropical storm to make someone feel truly insignificant and tiny. Thanks for sharing!
Not too confusing to take away from the poem though, kudos!
Peanut butter honey banana sandwiches
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Guilty gifts - by Keith - 02-08-2017, 08:03 AM
RE: Guilty gifts - by Quixilated - 02-08-2017, 01:38 PM
RE: Guilty gifts - by Keith - 02-10-2017, 06:06 AM
RE: Guilty gifts - by CRNDLSM - 02-10-2017, 06:55 AM
RE: Guilty gifts - by Donald Q. - 02-10-2017, 08:29 AM
RE: Guilty gifts - by Keith - 02-11-2017, 10:23 AM
RE: Guilty gifts - by Mark Cecil - 02-16-2017, 03:46 AM
RE: Guilty gifts - by Keith - 02-22-2017, 02:26 AM
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