Church of the Cul de Sac

[Keith]

Hi Keith

I omitted the first 'we are', and it reads more smoothly, I think.

And I took out the second HOA (yes, it is Home Owner's Association), and tried to find a different way of wording it. I originally had it read, 'intercedes with our president,' but that lead people to think that he was corresponding with the POTUS which was not the intent. So, I hope that it works this time.

Thank you for the read, the encouragement, and the help marking trouble spots.

Cheers,

Lizzie

Hi Lizzie
The edit works really well and it now reads smoother to me, very much enjoyed your poem and I know it's one I'll keep coming back to. Great job. Keith