think of all the baby plants that sprout.

[canofworms]

Hello.  Keith is right that the alliteration needs to be broken up. May I offer a sample re-write? Some people like that kind of thing, some people chafe at it. I find it's easier to show my suggestions sometimes than to state them. So, maybe something like this:

Think of all the baby plants sprouting
after softly slumbering in the soil,
their lone limb listing and leaning --
an awkward, unpracticed reach
for the sun, the rain --
while its roots wrap fast
round its mother's breast
with primal, tendril toes.

Instead of my silly double dash, use full em dashes.

I dropped primate, because that means monkeys and apes to me.

But, overall, I think it's beautiful.

Hope this helps.

Cheers,

Lizzie

Not at all. 
thank you.   

You know people are also primates. 

Would you like to see the photo that inspired this.?
I took it on January 18th and it was the first green I had seen in a while. 

I can't upload it and it's on my FB page. But I used it as my avatar.  Tiny... 

I pm'd it to you.