02-09-2017, 02:28 AM
Hi Keith 
I omitted the first 'we are', and it reads more smoothly, I think.
And I took out the second HOA (yes, it is Home Owner's Association), and tried to find a different way of wording it. I originally had it read, 'intercedes with our president,' but that lead people to think that he was corresponding with the POTUS which was not the intent. So, I hope that it works this time.
Thank you for the read, the encouragement, and the help marking trouble spots.
Cheers,
Lizzie
I omitted the first 'we are', and it reads more smoothly, I think.
And I took out the second HOA (yes, it is Home Owner's Association), and tried to find a different way of wording it. I originally had it read, 'intercedes with our president,' but that lead people to think that he was corresponding with the POTUS which was not the intent. So, I hope that it works this time.
Thank you for the read, the encouragement, and the help marking trouble spots.
Cheers,
Lizzie