Got drunk and went on a rant. Sharing my pain and anger.

[canofworms]

if you don't state that you don't wish feedback, people are free to give it, or critique as they see fit.

your first line:

my mom and pa who worked so hard I always was so trying.

sorta stopped me from reading anymore. in novice i would have said watch out for bad syntax [yoda speak] .

bu, i continued and found the cliche to jar more than it should.

the only line i enjoyed was the pastor fran line.

yeah I totally agree that line makes me want to stop reading it too.
I had to delete those first two lines. They were just too bad. I left the rest in all it's terrible glory.

Yeah, Pastor Fran was born into madness and he bred madness. A true man of god.

But it did spawn an actual thought out piece.