02-08-2017, 05:01 AM
I don't know if you're looking for feedback on this one or not. Presuming the last bit is talking about another man in the girl's life? Is 'boot' inferring that the girl is being kept under someone's heel? This is good content, but I don't understand where the painting bit factors in. The last two lines just lack clarity for me.
I like the title very much, and that idea of two people heading the same direction, getting so close but never touching fits well with the first two lines.
I like the title very much, and that idea of two people heading the same direction, getting so close but never touching fits well with the first two lines.