02-08-2017, 03:01 AM
Thank you for the feedback, I was thinking some things are better left unwritten. As for the title, all diagnosis are for one person, affecting them at the same time. I had to sit in on a session with the doctor and this person, and always thought he was taking advantage of the persons sickness, which was very real, probably misdiagnosed. Maybe I should have included what the trauma was somewhere that kind of spurned the rest.
So this poem takes place with drastic personality changes within one evening. I was reluctant to add ADD because I don't really want to acknowledge it at all, having been told my whole life I am, but medicine is given for it, put on some alcohol and experience all these disorders, the real psychosis as I was aware of it, come out in full force. I wanted 13 letters in the title, and four scenes, and shock value, thought it all fit together fairly nicely if it is abhorrent.
So I should either change the title because it leaves the reader wanting what isn't there, or change the story to explore each part of the title in more detail...
Not sure I should pursue this one, thank you again!
So this poem takes place with drastic personality changes within one evening. I was reluctant to add ADD because I don't really want to acknowledge it at all, having been told my whole life I am, but medicine is given for it, put on some alcohol and experience all these disorders, the real psychosis as I was aware of it, come out in full force. I wanted 13 letters in the title, and four scenes, and shock value, thought it all fit together fairly nicely if it is abhorrent.
So I should either change the title because it leaves the reader wanting what isn't there, or change the story to explore each part of the title in more detail...
Not sure I should pursue this one, thank you again!
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