02-08-2017, 01:57 AM
Crundle, I don't see how the disorders you mention have anything to do with the poem. Additionally, ADHD (while it's in the DSM for identification purposes) is not a disorder but just a different way of being human, same as autism.
The sonics of the title are good, but misleading.
Dale is right that what you are describing does sound more like BPD, yet there's elements of NPD too. It's very muddled. It's not a clear picture of any one disorder, which makes it read like some kind of disordered personality that's difficult to label. Which is fine, there's really no need for labels pe se, but then I would recommend changing the title because it begs for folks like me to come along and tut and fuss.
The fact that it's in four stanzas makes me think you're trying to address one disorder per stanza, but I don't see the connections between the stanzas and the disorders. Although, in the final stanza, it is true that a lot of ADHDers need some kind of low-level stimulation like a story, a podcast, music, or quiet tv in the background in order to sleep. That bit rings true.
Hope this helps some.
Best to you!
Lizzie
The sonics of the title are good, but misleading.
Dale is right that what you are describing does sound more like BPD, yet there's elements of NPD too. It's very muddled. It's not a clear picture of any one disorder, which makes it read like some kind of disordered personality that's difficult to label. Which is fine, there's really no need for labels pe se, but then I would recommend changing the title because it begs for folks like me to come along and tut and fuss.
The fact that it's in four stanzas makes me think you're trying to address one disorder per stanza, but I don't see the connections between the stanzas and the disorders. Although, in the final stanza, it is true that a lot of ADHDers need some kind of low-level stimulation like a story, a podcast, music, or quiet tv in the background in order to sleep. That bit rings true.
Hope this helps some.
Best to you!
Lizzie